Davey's Place Episode Deux

edited July 2010 in Comics
EPISODE TWO IS HERE.

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Don't worry, I won't use the forums as a place to post all my comics, I just need a little more critiquing. ;)

I'm not really happy with Mario's face color in panel three, any ideas on that?

Adding backgrounds to the next episode.
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  • edited July 2010
    Yeah, his hair and mustache are kinda a different color (and a bit blurrier?) then the eyebrows, makes it look kinda odd.

    What Samus would be doing in a Mario comic I have no idea, (Smash Bros comic?), but ya know, they don't know how she got there either I guess.
    I like it so far, but then again I have weird tastes.
  • edited July 2010
    Azrodal wrote:
    Yeah, his hair and mustache are kinda a different color (and a bit blurrier?) then the eyebrows, makes it look kinda odd.

    That would be because I used a semi-transparent brush to cover his eyes rather than a solid color (which looked worse). I was thinking that using the rubber stamp tool might fix that, but man, I suck with that tool.
    Azrodal wrote:
    What Samus would be doing in a Mario comic I have no idea, (Smash Bros comic?), but ya know, they don't know how she got there either I guess.

    Well, it's more of a 16 bit video game comic than a Mario comic, but yeah, I get what you're saying. I'll just say it'll all be explained in the main storyline (which I've yet to think up).
    Azrodal wrote:
    I like it so far, but then again I have weird tastes.

    Awesome!
  • edited July 2010
    The closeups are blurred. Either try to figure out how to turn off anti-aliasing off when resizing the sprites or do your resizing in something like mspaint which doesn't do anti-aliasing. It'll keep your edges cleaner and more sprite-like. This will also make it easier to modify sprites and you will be able to avoid the color awkwardness like you have with Mario's face in panel 3.

    On the writing side, try not to overdo the self-deprecating humor. It's fine for a bit, but not in the long term.
  • edited July 2010
    XoLore wrote: »
    On the writing side, try not to overdo the self-deprecating humor. It's fine for a bit, but not in the long term.

    Oh right, forgot to mention that, yeah, it's fine for the first like 5 or so, but far too many comics do that so it's a bit cliche.
  • edited July 2010
    XoLore wrote:
    The closeups are blurred. Either try to figure out how to turn off anti-aliasing off when resizing the sprites or do your resizing in something like mspaint which doesn't do anti-aliasing. It'll keep your edges cleaner and more sprite-like. This will also make it easier to modify sprites and you will be able to avoid the color awkwardness like you have with Mario's face in panel 3.

    On the writing side, try not to overdo the self-deprecating humor. It's fine for a bit, but not in the long term.

    Thanks for the tips man! The next time I have a close up scene I'll be sure to try Paint.
    Azrodal wrote:
    Oh right, forgot to mention that, yeah, it's fine for the first like 5 or so, but far too many comics do that so it's a bit cliche.

    Right on. I plan to include myself in the strip quite a bit so I'll watch for that pitfall.
  • edited July 2010
    i really love the new comic and i like the new direction your taking heres another fan comic i made dumbcomix2.jpg?t=1280090295
  • edited July 2010
    God, this comic is still terrible.
  • edited July 2010
    Welcome back Socks.
  • edited July 2010
    Yay, my best buddy is back! :)
  • edited July 2010
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  • edited July 2010
    Well that was unnecessary...
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  • edited July 2010
    are you implying that your goddamn double chin and shitty hair could ever be friends with a true anime icon like TK?
  • edited July 2010
    Yes.
  • edited July 2010
    LOL i bet you never even watched Angel Beats you nerd....
  • edited July 2010
    Wait, you're calling people nerds for NOT watching anime now? There should be a Committee to Finally Figure Out the Definition of that Word. (CtFFOtDotW)
  • edited July 2010
    are you implying that your goddamn double chin and shitty hair could ever be friends with a true anime icon like TK?

    You forgot the moobs, don't forget the moobs.
  • edited July 2010
    inb4 Scott gets permabanned LOL

    waiting to see what happens
  • edited July 2010
    and you say I'm nothing but 4chan shit.
  • edited July 2010
    Man, NO ONE belongs in 4chan, you're better then that Socks.
  • edited July 2010
    Right, well this isn't a discussion about 4chan.

    So stop it.
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  • edited July 2010
    Oh, are you one of those posters RCS?
  • edited July 2010
    Are you propositioning me, you sick fuck?
  • edited July 2010
    Wow, you sure do have a sick mind RCS.
  • edited July 2010
    I was not the one asking to cyber. I'm sorry, but you are nowhere in my league. I don't go out with 12 year old chubby boys.
  • edited July 2010
    Look, is there any way we can lock him from the thread or just the conservatory forum? He's fine elsewhere, it seems this thread is his problem for now.
  • edited July 2010
    That's actually really clever...
  • edited July 2010
    Or he could just avoid this thread since he doesn't like it, instead of coming back for some ridiculously odd reason.
  • edited July 2010
    Well excuse me for an opinion on a terrible comic. It's not my fault this new kid keeps egging me on. He's addressing me, by acronym, to try to make some half baked comments, which goes to show how poor of writer he is in the first place, which is reflected in his comics. I'm. Sorry. That Davey is bad at comics.